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Some thoughts:
What is it
        That makes us decide who we
love

When does a THOUGHT
Become an ACTION
Caught between fractions
Of a broken heart, made new again
Only to be broken
Frozen, lying open
So
What is it


Was it the thought that-

What is it that makes us DECIDE
We can't LIVE
WITHOUT

Each other
What is the spark
Forcing apart
All we thought we knew about us
All we know is how to fall

Was it the pattern of-

Put a hole in my heart
Careful fingers
Hold me while I
Slowly shiver
Pain lingers
It's hard to live this long
When deep inside
It feels so wrong
Much to strong
Pain prolonged

Was it the thought that started?
Was it the pattern of my beating heart?
Was it the careful balance of what we love?
Was it the way you saw right into me?


When does an ACTION
Become a CONNECTION
Caught between friendship
A broken one at that, meant to be new again
We lie here, aching
Slowly breaking
So what do we

Was it the careful balance-

Put a bullet in my heart
Careful arms
Hold me while I
Slowly shiver
Pain
Never
Lingers
Hard to live this long
Deep inside
Feels so
Much too

Was it the way you saw right into me?

Right this wrong.
I have no idea if this works and it probably doesn't but oh well, it was fun to write :)
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MittantZGFiry Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
Watch Bleach by any Chance? I've started writing some FF of Bleach :P
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The-Shadow-artist Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Rach, you're so good at writing it kills me.
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LeRachParade Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Student Writer
Gah thank you Meg!!! :D
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The-Shadow-artist Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
you're welcome! ^^
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Mindl3ss-Cr3ator Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This does work!

Funny. This poem actually corresponds with the series I'm reading. :iconorzplz: I'm sad because the next book doesn't come out until Fall but it's a good read so far!

If you're interested, it's the Divergent Series by Veronica Roth. The books she wrote so far for this series in order is:
-Divergent
-Insurgent

Unless you've been reading it as well. Then disregard what I just said. :XD:
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DojangDoll Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
OH my goodness DIVERGENT!!! I read it for a book club last year!!! I liked it until the end where it just started going crazy!
Is the sequel any better?
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Mindl3ss-Cr3ator Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
The sequel had a couple of twists but it is really good! Once again i ended at a cliff hanger but the overall plot made me want to read more!
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DojangDoll Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Then I guess I'll have to give it another shot!
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LeRachParade Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Student Writer
Really? :o That's pretty cool. I've heard a lot about the Divergent series, but that's from Tumblr which has occasionally put me off, but I'll probably read it eventually :D
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Mindl3ss-Cr3ator Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You should! It's worth the time! :D

I'm not kidding. I finish those books in one weekend because I get so wrapped up.
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